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You can use this page to comment on Fall 2. Toothless100 13:07, July 4, 2011 (UTC)
What about the USA army?[]
Hey, there is a large plothole you have to take care of before this story can be featured.
why would Wikia form a pact with BioSyn while their only condition is that they leave Wikia alone?
Dodgson wants to conquer the USA, he conquers a city and hold for a month. What was the USA army doying in all that time. And why does InGen form the only treat to BioSyn?
Further, a dinosaur-army is worsed than useless against a well organised army.
You have to take care for this problem. This are possible solutions that came to my mind:
- The story takes place in a really small town in the US desert with limited comminication.
- The story takes place in a small African country without a well equipted army.
- Hammond, Lex and Tim could be there because Hammond has a biological preserve in Africa (see Jurassic Park movie)
- Dogson objective was to conquer only that country and after that he could build a real army.
MismeretMonk 14:41, August 27, 2011 (UTC)
OK. As for the pact thing... Biosyn probably threatened Wikia with something BAD, and it would happen unless they could use Wikia's stuff. Would that work? And I'll sort out the rest - lots of editing work to do. And not much time to do it. 81.155.26.134 15:14, August 27, 2011 (UTC)
Sorry, that was me. I've made a couple of changes, saying that its a small city (I'll change it to town) with limited communications to the outside world. Is this OK? I've removed the city name as well, and I'll need to change Dodgon's plan. Then will it be OK? Toothless100 - Talk to me 15:27, August 27, 2011 (UTC)
Not bad. The idea of controlling dinosaurs bears somewhat of a resemblance to the plot of the game Jurassic Park: Dinosaur Battles.
Really? Never played that game. Never even heard of it... Toothless100 - Talk to me 18:10, December 14, 2011 (UTC)
This is the first story I've actually read from beginning to end, and I thought it was pretty good. Just one thing, the line in Lex's diary where it says she had "recovered from yesterday's trauma", referring to the death of her brother, is just unrealistic. This was her brother, for God's sake, I think it would take more than a day for her to get over it.CyborgIguana 00:23, June 30, 2012 (UTC)